750-1000 words personal statement

I attached the requirement of the personal statement and also my previous personal statement about my background (feel free to re-use my background information).  And below are the detail I would like to include in the Personal Statement. And please consider this as an University application and put in details which would be helpful for the application.

I am currently major in Business and did get a good grade with the core courses.
I also took a multicultural business consulting course which I would like to include in the personal statement. ( This course help me increase my network with people and also made me confirmed myself that Business is an Area that  I would like to pursue and work within the rest of my life.
I start working in a restaurant since I was 16 and got a promotion from my manager to become an Accounting assistant in their company’s human resource office.
I start saving when I was 16 and I managed to put in most of my saving into the stock market in 2018 as tuition to learn about how the economy works. I lost some money in the beginning and I start researching the reason and the relationship between government policy and company and investor decision.  And luckily, I  recovered all my loss and start making profits in 2019.
My goal is to become an economist or jobs relate to the economy, which I could apply my knowledge and find interest in my careers.